Chapter 3 – Annual Arms Competition II

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Sylvia’s heart was beating even faster than before. Afraid that he would hear it, she steeled herself and curtsied. “Hello,” She replied.

“Hi Sylvia!” Anise also called out to her with a big smile.

“Hi Anise.” She returned a radiant smile to conceal her embarrassment.

“So what were you doing here Sylvia?” Her mother questioned again.

Turning to look at her mother, she saw a big grin. “I–…” She didn’t dare to answer in front of everyone. Her face began heating up. She knew her mom knew why.
Her mother was the only person she ever talks to about her feelings. She had already made it quite clear that she liked the boy. Her mom’s question was just a means of teasing her.

“Just kidding, honey. What about you Naleen? How did your match go?” her mother turned to question Naleen instead.

“It went well, Lady Reanne. I’m waiting for the next match right now.”

“I see. You girls walking around to watch the matches?”

“To the food stalls, actually. We were going to grab a snack before Naleen’s next match.” Jillian answered.

“Ah, why don’t we go together then?” Her mother turned to her. “Or would you rather stay here, Sylvia?”

“Eh? I’m coming too…” Sylvia quickly replied.

“Anise, do you want to go get a snack with everyone else?”

Her eyes lit up upon hearing her crafty mother asking the young girl.

“Daddy, can I go?” Anise turned to her dad and pleaded.

“Only if you stay with the group. And Kaidus, please go with your sister.” Troyle answered.

Internally, she was shouting with joy. Her mother knew exactly what to do. By asking for the young girl to join them, there was no way Anise would be leaving her big brother behind. Even if Troyle did not tell him, Anise would have pleaded for Kaidus to join them.

They were moving away from the second stage and towards the food vendors. Anise clung to Kaidus’ left arm while she herself walked beside Anise.

Two guards were in the front leading the way.
Jillian, Naleen, and her mother were walking behind the guards while the three of them followed. There were an additional two guards on each side of them, and two following behind—along with the two Ravon knights.
Her mother was talking to Naleen about Naleen’s parents, but Sylvia wasn’t paying any attention to that conversation.

She was occupied, remembering how they used to walk like this—following behind her mother and Adalina—as they went shopping in the 3rd ward market district a couple of years ago.

“How are you enjoying the competition?” Kaidus asked her.

Although lost in thoughts, his simple question rang in her ears and brought a bright smile to her face. “It is quite exciting, really.” She calmly answered. “I never thought there could be so many people in one place at the same time. Such a festive atmosphere is truly breathtaking.” She gave an honest reply, having witnessed the competition for the first time.

“It is, isn’t it?”

“Kai look.” Anise pointed to a performer in the crowd.

The performer was an older Gveril man with long gray hair. The man had a broken horn, but his metallic arm was spinning a spear around skillfully. The man called his two assistants to join him and they began demonstrating different spear forms before fighting each other, displaying their abilities.

“He’s very good.” She heard him voice out loud his thoughts.

“Is he stronger than daddy?” Anise questioned her brother with a puzzled look.

“Maybe, maybe not. It’s hard to tell from just demonstrations, but he’s certainly adept with the spear.”

“Hey! You guys are falling behind!” Jillian yelled out from ahead.
Looking in front, they were at least twenty paces away and behind a wall of people.
They quickened their speed to catch up.

“Sylvia.” Kaidus spoke up beside her. “Thank you for everything you’ve done for my mother these past couple turns, and for always looking after Anise.”

Her heart fluttered, and her face started burning up. She was not expecting such gracious words. “S-Such thanks are unnecessary… It is Adalina and Anise who’s been taking care of me.” She replied, lowering her head to hide the embarrassment.

Although they were still visiting the Paltos house, it was not because of her mother’s original purpose, but because of a genuine friendship between their two families. She herself had grown quite fond of Anise, looking after the younger girl as a sister. After learning that Adalina was having another baby, she had taken it upon herself to do most of the chores and food preparations whenever they were over at the Paltos house.
She was not working because she coveted gratitude, but hearing the thanks from him brought endless delight and joy.

“Regardless, thank you for everything you’ve done.” He replied.

“No… I didn’t…”Afraid she would make a fool of herself, she stopped and walked silently beside them.

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Naleen swerved to the side, barely evading a strike. She moved around her opponent and launched herself forward, thrusting with her wooden sword.
Her opponent quickly turned around and blocked it with his hand axes, getting knocked back a couple steps.
She moved forward once again and kicked at the man’s left leg while swinging her sword, but the kick was shallow and her slash was blocked once again. The man was larger than herself, and a lot stronger.

She was currently fighting her 3rd match, and it was another one of those long drawn out fights.
Naleen quickly put some distance between them and began trying to come up with a plan of attack.

She attempted to ponder what the other boy would do: what Kaidus would have done in this situation.
The last time she’d seen him was that morning he departed for Zorin Academy almost six years ago. Witnessing his match earlier, she’d been having a hard time coming to terms with such a thing. Although he was smaller than herself, the boy easily grounded a man twice his size with a single blow.
It was done without hesitation nor fear, and the speed of his strike was beyond that of a boy his age. From what she saw, it was like when she watched Horan and her father—two master swordsmen—sparring with no restrictions.

*Thwack!* She brought her sword up horizontally and blocked a vertical strike. The man’s strike pushed down her sword and the head of the axe was edging closer to her shoulder. Pushing and moving her body, she managed to roll away before her opponent’s other axe whizzed by, grazing her legs.
Naleen quickly recovered out of the roll and darted away to keep her distance.
‘I can’t lose here. I’m here to win this competition.’ She told herself.

Unrelenting, the man charged at her again.
She changed her sword to a two handed grip. Stepping forward to meet the charge, she attempted a two handed thrust.
The man struck the thrust to the side and swung his axe at her with an overhead swing.

She felt the force of his first strike against her sword, numbing her hands for that instant.
Instead of moving away to dodge the overhead strike, Naleen ducked forward and closed in on the man. With her sword still out of position, she released her two handed grip. Using her right hand—that was still holding the sword—as a brace, she charged in front of the man and elbowed his stomach with her left.

It had the desired effect, and the man lost his solid stance, instinctively moving one of his hand to grab at where she elbowed him.

Naleen darted behind him, having done some damage.
She saw her chance. Instead of waiting for the man to recover, she swiftly kicked the back of the man’s knees, buckling him forward.
With her opponent on his knees, she quickly swung her wooden sword down to his neck, stopping before the impact. She shot a glance at the announcer, and the match was over.

With haste, she stepped off the stage to a plethora of praises from the audience. Her two house knights fell in behind her as she walked over to where Jillian and Sylvia were waiting.

“Way to go, Naleen.” Jillian commended.

“Are you alright? You seemed to be in a pinch a couple of times.” Sylvia questioned.

“I’m fine. There’s going to be a few more fights until my next match. What do you both want to do?” she asked the two girls.

“Would it be alright if we went to look for my parents?” Sylvia shyly asked.

“Why don’t you just say ‘go look for Kaidus’?” Jillian spoke with annoyance.

“…”

“Sure.” Naleen answered, seeing the silent Sylvia.
They had separated from the others ever since their trip to the food area. At the rate she was going, if she kept winning, she’ll eventually face off against him sooner or later. It would be good to get some information about his combat capabilities beforehand.

Although she didn’t understand Sylvia’s infatuation with the boy, it didn’t matter to her. From what she remembers, he was a liar, and a spineless coward. That match earlier may have tipped her view of him a little, but none of it mattered as he didn’t even remember her.
She recalled him the moment Sylvia spoke his name, but the same thing couldn’t be said about him.
Not only will he remain a liar and a coward in her eyes, now he was also a crass idiot.

The three girls started walking away from the stage as their guards followed behind.

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The day was well past the afternoon.

An old Knight wearing plated armor decorated with a helmet and sword on the breastplate was walking through the event grounds, making his way towards the second stage.
He was working in tandem with a few others in charge of organizing today’s security, but had left the position to his son for the time being.

Many of the knights who were working around stage two and came to report at the eastern tent, were clamoring about something extraordinary occurring there. About an unknown dark haired boy who was single handedly decimating all his opponents. Many were saying the boy fought using both single and dual sword styles, switching between them expertly.

As the old Knight approached the stage, an extensive wall of people impeded his path. The stage had garnered quite the audience, and he could do nothing but watch from afar.

There were currently two people on stage squaring off against each other.
A youth even younger than his granddaughter, and a woman with a sword and shield. The youth had long black hair and was deftly wielding two swords against his opponent.

The young boy flitted around the woman as if gliding along the stage, looking for an opening. In an instant, his swords flickered and his opponent drop the protective shield. Two quick strikes, and the woman fell onto the ground.

He heard as the stage thundered with applause and shouts. The announcer bellowed out the victor’s name, but he was unable to make out who it was through all the noise.

The boy bowed and calmly walked off the stage without any problem.

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Midafternoon came around, and the number of contestants had dwindled.

They were only using three stages now, and only those who have been winning were competing against each other. From the hundreds of contestants, less than thirty were still in the tournament.
Rest periods in between each match had shortened drastically, and it was now more a mental than physical competition. Those who had been winning decisively were beginning to lose because of accumulated fatigue through strenuous physical exertion, and many had even given up, understanding that they could no longer continue.
It was truly a competition of the most stalwart of contenders.

Kaidus stepped onto the stage again as his name had been called. He was tired, but not to the point of exhaustion. His matches had been relatively quick, allowing for plenty of rest.

His next opponent was a Gveril man with dull green hair, and looked to be in his late twenties. The man’s horn shone in the midafternoon sun majestically. His metallic arm held a long slim wooden sword.

“I’ve been watching your matches. How is it that a young one like you has come upon such skills?” The man asked as they stood face to face.

“I’ve had some great teachers.” Kaidus replied, giving a courteous bow to his opponent.

“That so? I would love to meet them some day.” Surprisingly, the man also returned a polite bow.

“Contestants ready?”… “Begin!”

Unlike his other matches, Kaidus was taken by surprise this time.
The instant the signal was given, the man’s sword tip shot straight out at him—without warning—aiming to pierce his chest. Kaidus quickly swiped upward with his two swords, cutting at the man’s attack, deflecting it.

With the defensive parry, the man lunged straight at him, repositioning the long slim sword once again for a draw strike.

Kaidus hastily darted to the man’s left side, moving away from the impending slash.

The man fluidly changed his direction mid-dash, slashing out at him once again.

The sword veered over to where Kaidus was as if alive with a mind of its own.
He smiled, seeing his opponent’s skills. The man was definitely better than many of his previous opponents. Bracing himself, his own swords shot forth and delivered four quick and consecutive blows into the long sword, stopping it before it could hit him.
He dashed straight for his opponent, evading the next few strikes, moving to get in close for some body blows.
His opponent saw thought his plan and moved backwards, keeping him at a distance with flurries of quick precise slashes.
Seeing the futility of it, Kaidus stopped his pressure. ‘It’s almost like fighting uncle Dalzak again.’ He mused to himself and changed to a low stance.

The man saw his switch, prepped his own stance and watched cautiously.

He could see that his opponent was breathing heavily, possibly worn out from their exchanges or maybe even before the fight.
Kaidus slowly lowered both his swords, bringing his right to align with the left. In a sudden burst of movement, he launched straight at the man. From a low angle, his right sword flew upward, cutting into the man’s frantic defense. Another upward strike followed behind and ripped the sword out of the man’s hands, hurling it into the crowd. Following Twin Fangs, he jumped and kneed the man’s chest, sending the man backward to the edge of the stage.

The man stumbled, but refused to fall.
Without a weapon in hand, “Wait, wait. I forfeit.” The man cheerfully accepted his defeat. “I saw it the instant I failed to land that initial strike. I dare say, this country is full of surprises. Thank you for this enlightening bout, and may we meet again someday.” The man grinned, stepping off the edge of the stage.

“Thank you.” Kaidus uttered, bowing once again to the man who was disappearing into the audience.

“Kai you’re the best!” Anise cried out, hugging him as soon as he joined them.

The Varath couple was no longer with them, having left elsewhere with their daughters. He had asked about Larant earlier, but Lord Varath said the older boy was currently busy with various things for school and had not been coming home for the past couple ryes.

“Wonder where he’s from. He felt quite strong.” Troyle stated.

“He is. I forgot to ask for his name though.”

“That quick draw at the beginning was quite the technique. I don’t think I’ve seen anything like that before.”

“It took me by surprise, but just a little.” Kaidus replied with a grin.

Troyle gave him a peculiar look. “I know that smile. Don’t tell me you?”

“It won’t be perfect, but I’m sure I can imitate it if I use magic. It’ll probably take me a while before I can do it without.”

“Hahahaha! Come here!” Troyle grabbed him and started rubbing his head proudly.

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It was her 8th match, and her laborious effort every fight was taking its toll on her body.

She had severely underestimated the sheer magnitude of the arms competition. Thinking about it now, her outcry of winning the competition was nothing but arrogance and a general lack of understanding.

Having watched the competition four years in a row, she thought she had a firm grasp of what to expect. Yet, watching two people fighting and being directly involved in the matches were two very different things.
The competition only got harder as it progressed: with the skilled contestants weeding out the weaker ones, each match became tougher than the last, forcing her to put in twice the amount of effort.

Walking towards her was her greatest adversary yet. As she foresaw, the matches eventually paired her up against the boy. Against Kaidus.

Looking at the boy’s relaxed movements, she could tell there was no way for her to win. He had effortlessly dispatched many of his opponents while she had to painstakingly struggle against hers.

“Let us have a good match.” The boy bowed to her as he had done to all his other opponents.

“Likewise.” Taken aback by his nonchalant attitude, she nodded. She took two steps back and readied herself. Grasping her sword with a two-handed grip, she silently awaited for the call to start.

“Begin!”

She quickly moved away from her initial position and barely managed to dodge a strike. The boy’s first attack was as quick as ever.
If she hadn’t been watching his matches and didn’t know about his inhuman speed, she would have lost already.

She lurched sideways awkwardly, barely stumbling away from the next attack.
His swords came at her with a horizontal swing. Naleen slashed out with her own sword, blocking the slashes. The impact knocked her back, causing her to stumble a few paces before catching her footing again.

Before she could ready herself, he was already upon her. One of his swords smashed into her own sword, numbing her hand and shooting intense pain all along her arm. She felt a sharp pain in her hands as the boy’s other sword dislodged her grip, causing her to drop the wooden weapon.

“No!” She cried out, instinctively reaching down to grab the sword once again.

The boy also lowered himself, holding two swords to her chest. “Give up.” He told her, not finishing her off.

She jumped back to put some distance between them. Anger boiled up from inside her. “You!” She angrily shouted.
The fact that he doesn’t remember her was incomparable to the way he was treating her now. To look down on her and not deliver the finishing strike was disrespectful. It was disrespectful to her as a warrior, and to the years of hard work she’d put into getting this far.

I can’t lose to someone like him!’ She shouted internally.
She glared at him standing over her sword. Her body twitched, and she lunged in head-first for the sword.

“Forgive me.”
She heard as pain manifested across her back, knocking her to the ground.

No. I can’t lose…’ Her inner self cried out.
In her anguish, memories flashed through her mind.
Her first meeting with the boy. Her humiliation that night at dinner. Her grandfather’s words and praises. Her many bruises and callouses incurred over countless evenings of practice.
Suppressing her tears, something else came into her mind.
The image of a crystal flower on top of her dresser, sitting there silently for all these years.

Tears began to swell from inside.
The world truly was unfair. Not only was the boy already a mage, he’s even surpassed her with the sword.

“Why!?” She shouted out. Not to anyone in particular, but because of her own frustration.
Everything she’s done was to prove herself to those around her.
To her parents.
To her brother.
To everyone who treated her like a princess that needed protecting.
To show her grandfather that she too, was worthy of his praises and approval.

Even her talent with the sword could only take her so far. She saw for herself today what true talent was.
They were right… I’m no one. Just a little girl who wanted to be spoiled…
She closed her eyes, and tears leaked out.

Suddenly, the image of the crystal flower bloomed into her mind once again.

!’ She felt as if a spark ignited inside her.
Her body felt like lighting had struck it.
“Ahhh!!!” The pain on her back intensified, as if trying to rip her apart.
Her fingertips rippled with a numbing sensation that started to move along her arms to her body as if alive.

She felt two hands grab her shoulders and turn her body upward. She saw the dark haired young man’s face staring back at her: his mouth moving, but she could not hear what he was saying.

“AHhh!! W-what’s GUHHH!!!–…”
Flames erupted around her. The pain intensified, and her mind went blank.

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69 Responses to Chapter 3 – Annual Arms Competition II

  1. Chhomp says:

    First

  2. BanSlam says:

    thanks cant wait for the next one

  3. samurice says:

    Cliff hannga. Thanks for the chapter

  4. So did she forget that he gave a gift so pretty that she fell in love with kaidus? I thought at the beginning that you had forgot that she started to respect him…Come to think of it, it still kinda seems that way. It’s kinda weird that she she forgot the first person roughly her age who she had a slight crush on isn’t it? Especially considering her lack of contact with male peers.
    Anyways, thanks for the new chapter!

  5. Nex Serus says:

    is that a new flag at the last few paragraph?

  6. zhaoyun says:

    Thanks for the chapter. Eager to see the outcome.

  7. HeartoCourage2 says:

    Nice, an awakening?

  8. Clovis says:

    Way to go get that harem active!! xD
    Thanx keep it up , doing some nice work there!

  9. Thank you for the chapter!!XD

  10. shuusui4 says:

    so she just had an Awakening??

  11. TheFrostDude says:

    Thanks for the new chapter!
    What the fudge is happening to her?!

  12. optionnal says:

    thanks for the chapter..

  13. agila0212 says:

    I don’t understand the ending……

    thx for the chapter

  14. crocochan says:

    Did she awaken to her magic?

    Thanks for the chapter 😄

  15. Sloket says:

    yay (^.^)/ thanks for the chapter..awaiting the next XD

  16. chibi says:

    Her magic has awoken at the end.
    Now she will be more happy that he isn’t the only one with sword skills and magic 😀
    Go go go!!

  17. akishu20 says:

    Thanks a lot for the great Chapter 🙂
    Think i spotted a “the” that got somehow into a wrong place 😛
    At Naleens 3rd match: “she charged in front of the man and elbowed *the* his stomach with her left.”

  18. Admira says:

    Thanks for the chapter. How hold is he now, 14ish? If he was 7 (almost 8?) when he enrolled and it’s been 6 years, that would put him at 13-14 years old. Still a bit young for romance, I think. But then again, the time skip is already pretty big and we would have lost familiarity with him…

    But I think it’s perfectly normal to forget about someone you met or a present you got from them after a couple of years, regardless of the so-called “childhood crush” (which is really more of being infatuated with the idea of love than being in love). This is especially true for something that they experienced as children; even in teenage years, memories of childhood are comparatively faint.

  19. canaria23 says:

    *wheeze* 12 hours of reading fi-nally the last chapter… for now.

  20. Tracktor says:

    Thanks. Like it 😃

  21. Yahia says:

    thanks Za1d3 😀 btw its weekly or random ?

  22. q.m.s says:

    OMG
    I just found this by chance and I could not stop reading
    I don’t know if you are Japanese (like the people who write web novel) or just some great writer
    whatever it is, YOU ARE THE BEST

    ABOUT THE STORY
    one of the best novel I have read (better than Japanese)
    great story
    best MC that I ever seen
    great development
    nice family background (not like others, reborn in noble family and such)

    OVERALL
    you man gave me the best story that I could dream of reading
    (your cliffhanger are the best BUT they are annoying if you are like me who just started reading, I stayed awake until 4 a.m. because I couldn’t stop)

    PERSONAL OPINION (don’t worry about it)
    I like how the story is going
    I really really really really really hope it won’t end to be a harem
    it didn’t seem like that in the first book when Celene appeared
    but now Naleen
    the best thing about her is her jealousy and rivalry with Kaidus
    Sylvia, at least one is enough
    great development with her character from timid to someone who stand for them self (and her part is interesting and funny to read)

    • Za1d3 says:

      glad you like it.
      I’m neither Japanese nor a great writer, but I truly appreciate the compliments. 😀

    • No, the harem route must prevail !!
      Away with you, vile demon, do not speak of such blasphemy in this holy ground

      Nah, i dont care that much . But why cant Kai do what the MC of A Martial Odyssey did and Marry like 20 women at once?
      Well yeah thats way too many, i know.
      Harems just ensure everyone’s happy. I never hear complaints on reverse harems. . .
      Well i dont really care that much. I agree that harems get old.
      Honestly Naleen is my first choice. Sylvia is great but. . .
      Though if Celene makes a reappearance i would root for her. She seemed to have more depth. And Kai saving her and even healing her brother just made a deeper impression on me compared to Kai’s first meetings between the other two, wouldn’t you agree?

      • The_Truth says:

        No, I do not agree! I much prefer Kaidus with Sylvia instead of Naleen. Naleen just rubbed me the wrong way since the very first time Za1d3 introduced her to us, and this chapter just made me more irritated about her than before. I mean, she’s not happy that Kaidus doesn’t remember her, but everyone here needs to rewind to chapter 1 of book 2, you can see that it was Sylvia who reacted instantly when she heard the name “Kaidus”. Naleen however was ‘right next to her’ and frolicking around with Jillian, waiting for her next match. But when they went and meet, only after Sylvia said his name did Naleen looked at the boy in front of her. Do I hear ‘hypocrite’? I wonder if awakening to her powers would make her head bigger (arrogant, self-absorb, etc) as well like with her swordsmanship? And she even dares to call Kaidus a ‘coward’ when it was actually him saving her face in front of everyone. If she’ still hung up on that, then she hasn’t grown since the first book. In my mind, she’ still a girl who wants things to go her way (conceited brat doesn’t even realize it herself). Though I don’t mind Kaidus having a harem, I just hope that he doesn’t choose the wrong girl *cough*Naleen*cough*… Actually, Celene is nice as well, but I’m rooting for Sylvia because (1) we are more familiar with her, given that she appears more frequently than the other girls in the first book, (2) she is a noble, but she’s working hard to become a wife to Kaidus for more than 6 years, and (3) she’s already infatuated with Kaidus, the first in his harem, and the cause for this was that he chose to cut the ‘arranged’ marriage before it began. Forcing someone isn’t the way to a woman’s heart, but saving them from ‘those’ kinds of situation might.

        • q.m.s says:

          it turn into discussion (that was unexpected)
          *****
          Za1d3
          if there is a better word than great writer, then it is you (to bad my English is not good)
          **************
          Cupcake ninja
          not wanting harem is just preference
          for starter, as you said IT IS REALLY GETTING OLD
          more than that, all the MC with harem have something wrong with them (retarded, idiots, coward, arrogant, etc…) Kai is too cool for that
          and personally, I hate people who play around with more than one

          Celene, has the best interaction with Kai and great impression on me as well, but there is not much of her
          Sylvia, I like her because she tries to change to be better (she didn’t be like those shy idiot girls who do nothing)
          Naleen, her role as a rival is too good to change to an idiot who fall in love
          ******************
          The_Truth
          you know how I feel man
          I am with you man

          • Yeah Sylvia is great yet i just like Naleen cause she’s a side character. Few ppl root 4 side characters. I do realize her faults yet her anger towards not being remembered may have been why she still stubbornly thinks of Kai as a coward, though i never understood why she thought that in the first place. And yeah harem MCs are touched in the head by Alyschu but it just makes me sad when 1 girl gets the guy while the others are left behind. And usually it isnt even the best gir whose pickedl but some Bitch-Type Tsundere Loli !! Any yes Tsunderes have different types. Specifically, two types: the Moe type and Bitch type.
            The more you know 🙂
            Though MCs dont play around, they either ignore the girls’ feeling, pursue one or just are dense as fuck. And if the girls are fine with it its okay. MCs, being the way they are, need to be TOLD DIRECTLY by the girls about how they feel about him. If they dont understand that and just hang around the MC it would seem the MC does like to playing around. MCs aint players.

            And as for Celene we could just threat–* cough, cough *– i mean beg Za1d3 to bring her back. Yup “beg”, kekekek–* cough,cough *– sorry ignore the evil laugh. Nothing to be concerned about
            ( ; ~_~ )
            I like Celene best
            ‘Nuff said.

            Anyway, Sylvia’s love for Kai is the pure, innocent type. To me that equals delicate, fragile.
            Im holding out until im sure her love is strong enough to accept Kai’s darker side.
            Wat u think her reaction would be if she knew how many ppl he killed? Her love to me seems like glass.
            Also it seemed to me its more of a crush.
            Skin deep. Changing herself is fine but somehow that appears kinda odd i guess. She should be herself, be real. Kai wont fall for a prim, proper facade. Those 6 years showed her determination but that just isnt enough and changing yourself for any guy isnt something i agree with. Im a guy but still.
            .
            I think she got serious potential though. I like her, i do. I simply have concerns.

            And Naleen’s rival status, if you mean towards Kai, is nonexistent. She simply cant compete with him. Unless her she has some power that rivals Kai in all his Dvitus glory
            After reading this, if you still have something to say, go ahead.
            I like conversations 🙂
            I tried not to seem like a douche here , by the way.

            • The_Truth says:

              And here is where I refute to your statement, Cupcake ninja, about Sylvia’s love being fragile.

              How can you say it’s fragile when it lasted 6 years and never wavered, but only strengthened. The saying, “Distance makes the heart grow fonder” is true for our sweet Sylvia.

              For Celene, though she suffered a lot doesn’t mean that she can stomach what Kaidus can do to people (this is about your comment about “if Sylvia’s love being strong enough to accept Kaidus’s darker side”). Celene had also only seen the bright side of Kaidus, like every other person who didn’t wronged him. So to me, it’s Celene who’s more fragile like glass than Sylvia. Plus, Celene’s affection was stemmed from Kaidus being her savior. She doesn’t know who Kaidus is; what food he likes, that he likes to read, or the fact that he considers the situation carefully.

              However, Sylvia should know these things about Kaidus since she hangs out with his family and also gets stories/information from the most resourceful people: her parents.

              The fact about Sylvia changing herself, that’s your point of view, but to me her determination comes from the one characteristic that she has: to achieve the number one goal! And that is; to make Kaidus fall in love with her. She only does all those prim and proper ‘education’ because her most prominent example of a ‘lady who caught her target’ is her mother: Lady Rianne. From the guidance of the supreme manipulative lady that we know of, Sylvia will rule Kaidus’s heart. Hook, line and sinker!

              Your last comment about Naleen at the end: Love it!

        • I just replied to the other guy. Dammit im typing this out on my ps4 and i dont have keyboard !! It hurts mah thumbs replying with long comments, ya know?!?!
          If ya wanna say something after reading my last reply, go ahead.
          ‘Nuff said

          • q.m.s says:

            I agree with you
            sometimes, oh no, every-time the annoying bitch get the man
            and it is great if everyone is happy
            but the only one who fall in love with him right now is Sylvia

            it could be because of all the ones I read and saw about the Harem that I start to dislike them
            none of them have a clear ending
            just one guy surrounded by girls who love him
            and he is freaking dense and don’t do a thing (if you know a good one that the man actually know and do something let me know, but 20 women are waaaaaaaaay to many, maybe 3-5 is the max for me)
            or he knows and only surround himself with girls, there is no freaking story about it (just a guy going around and collecting girls, even if you tell he wants revenge or defeat the demon lord, it is still way off)
            and this story is going really good

            the girls
            I don’t hate any of them, just their role is great as it is
            Naleen; she is as you side, there is no rivalry with Kai (sorry, my English failed me)
            it is just her character of wanting to overcome him and her jealousy
            Sylvia; not exactly that she change, her personality is the same
            she just tried to grow from her timid habit and her shyness (I too hate girls who change who they are because of a guy, if that happen to her, she would be the first ones I dislike here)
            Celene; no comment, just that she had the best encounter with Kai

            and I normally never write comment on a story that I read
            but this was the BEST STORY THAT I READ
            and I started to like having this discussion as well

          • q.m.s says:

            I don’t know why
            but ever-time I write something it ends up long
            sorry about that

            • Ha dont worry i do that too. 20 women you say? So i assume you read a Martial Odyssey then, where the mc Marries 20+ women ? I like the story i guess but i Didn’t even try keeping track of all the girls’ names. It got old though, im on book 3 and prolly wont finish it 4 awhile.
              Hajime from Arifureta, you can find it at Japtem, has a harem but he is devoted to one women. To him the other girls are “important” but said only one is “special”. if you haven’t read it give it a try. MC aint a P*ssy like some others, and the guy is OP as F*ck. You might like it.
              Mushoku tensei’s MC married 3 women but loved them equally. Its a reincarnation storry too. The series ended with 20 volumes i think and a bonus novel that isnt out yet, or at least not translated.The MC isnt dense either, i liked the story so i recommend it. You may disagree with my taste though, who knows?
              Other than LNs, if you like actual, physical books i think you may like Chronicles of Nick from Sherrilyn Kenyon. Google it and see 4 yourself. Infinity is the 1st book and has at least 4-5 books out and ongoing. Kenyon writes other books, mostly romance. Her books include various Gods from mythology and werewolves, Vamps and the like.
              And rather than 1 guy getting surrounded by women, i like harems cause of the situations the MC is dragged into. Seeing them get flustered is amusing though sometimes when he get abused for things he cant control, i get pissed off.
              Other than that, there arent many harems that fit your specific tastes. Try the romance or drama genre. Mc there can be alot better comparatively but the growth they have is slow.
              Sylvia and the rest still have problems but they still got potential.
              Of course, the final boss is obviously Anise 🙂
              Kai dotes on her, Sylvia getting close to Anise was well planned.
              Not saying Sylvia is that scheming but still.
              I agree that FC is great.
              There are few stories i like this much.
              Its a Original but the author has talent.
              I could see this selling well.
              An unlike Wattpad, a good few people at RoyalRoad give good constructive criticism.
              Honestly this could be considered professional work, cause i read many books other than Manga and LNs so i would know. Some things like making his own terms was not necessary but showed his creativity.
              If he went Pro, i wouldn’t be surprised.
              Hell, even Twilight sold well and that series was targeted mainly to the fangirls.
              And yeah talking about stories you like with someone who likes it too feels good right?
              That is what makes us true Otakus!!
              See? I talk too much too XD

              • q.m.s says:

                yeah, I didn’t read Martial Odyssey
                20 women are tooooo much

                I did read Hajime from Arifureta, I had it on hold until more chapters comes. this one is great. regardless about caring only for one girl. his personalty is better than most harem. don’t go around and collect women. AND MOST IMPORTANTLY, HE IS NOT A PUSHOVER.
                and you just said the most important thing that I don’t like about harem, getting punished for things he didn’t do or can’t control. I also get pissed off.
                YOU ARE EITHER STRONG OR WEAK.
                Mushoku tensei, I read the manga and it was interesting until the spoiled ojousama came. I may give it another try.

                I will check the others books
                thanks

                I haven’t read books like you
                but I know for sure this is the one of the best story I read and this author is great

              • Cupcake ninja says:

                Your welcome and don’t worry about that red haired brat, she gets easier to deal with. She starts to respects Rudeus and actually developed a bit of an inferiority complex. Man but don’t trust that Damn human god. In the later volumes you’ll hate him for what his manipulation would have caused. That’s all I’m saying about that, since spoilers are sins.
                Now let’s help FC by spreading its glory throughout the nine realms!

            • Heh just noticed the 20 women thing u said was in response to my mentioning AMO earlier.

  23. kRaVeN~! says:

    Argggghhh~! Damn i read this for the whole night and reached the latest chapter >.>
    Damn i want moar~! T_T

    This is the 1st time that i like FF/original…

    Anyway Thanks for your hard work~! ^^
    I hope you can release next chapter faster~! =/

    BTW this is really good, there’s a few errors in grammar. But it’s just minor error anyway.
    (Even tho i’m not that good in English grammar)

    Nice Work~!
    Thanks Again~! ^_^

  24. rechaztika says:

    I read all the chapter in one day. And its really interesting story. Nice work!!!

    Is this your original story? I hope u insert some skets each chapter. (Dont mind it)

    Ps. I like harem so i will cheer for u. Hahaa

    • WARNING,EXTREMELY LONG AND POINTLESS RANT ABOUT TO COMMENCE .
      I CREATED THIS COMMENT AT THE HEIGHT OF BOREDOM.
      READ ONLY IF YOU HAVE NOTHING BETTER TO DO.

      hopefully this will bring amusement to whoever takes the time to read this 🙂

      Well without further ado:

      I see you understand the greatness of the harem route, as do i. Welcome, friend.
      We, those who know of the glories the Harem Route has to offer, are a dying breed. driven back by the followers of the One True Route– those vile creatures who believe in “pure love” nonsense of only 1 man and 1 woman relationships.

      In these dark times where harems are shunned by the ignorant masses we must look out for one another, to band together in the effort to keep our proud and noble ideals alive.
      But fear not not my friend, for there is a place, a Paradise, which knows of our ongoing struggle and offers us Sanctuary to weather the impending storm that represents the battle between our two factions. Its name is pirateyoshi.Wordpress.Com.
      On its Sacred Shores there lives a man who TLs the LN Epic Tale of the Forsaken Hero, a holy text containing a story wherein a MC achieved the Harem Route and inadvertently spurred a young monk named Hendricksen to create the Holy DaMaki Church. The Church, although acknowledging only a single Goddess named Yuina-sama, teaches those like us the righteousness that is the Harem Route and the glory that is the True Way of Moe!!!!!!

      Come, my friend, let us depart to the Sacred Shores and bring honor back to the Great Harem Empire!!!!

      • Escroimi says:

        .oO(………….. )

      • Escroimi says:

        My favorite harem ending is DearS.

        • Ah DearS. A true Harem if ever there was one. Okay, i decided.
          Come with us.
          Join our great Church.

          Ya know, DearS was one of the first Harem anime i saw. Glad to know it wasnt forgotten.

          • Escroimi says:

            Manga ending is much better. Hint is she is the gate while he is the key. If you thinking se *ahem* repopulation then yes. All zeroes and those who came with him awaken their reproductive function and they are on a spaceship in space. The lust is so great those dearS that remained on earth sensed it. Runner up is the ending of Omamori Himari.

            • Cupcake ninja says:

              Did that last one end? The manga? If so then dammit, I might never finish it now. I have a thing where i don’t really read manga and LNs that ended. Its too depressing. I need to look up the wiki for those then. Want to at least know what happened in their endings. Why do stories end?
              TT^TT

  25. I’m really enjoying the story so far. Your writing has steadily improved from the first chapters. Thank you for sharing it with us.

  26. Andrez-ssi says:

    yup, this is good; damn good. Is this Naleen’s awakening to magic?

  27. Chhomp says:

    when might the next chapter be up? not rushing or anything but just in anticipation >.<
    great work btw.

    • Za1d3 says:

      Thanks. Hopefully i’ll have the next chapter by tonight or tomorrow at the latest.
      Been quite busy these past couple days.

      • Oi~~
        Dude where’s my chapter at?
        TT ^ TT
        i cant. . . I cant t-take this anymore.
        I need. . . My chapter
        Please. . . Give me my ch-chapter.
        I. . . I’ll make you feel good, so,p-please just. . .
        X_X

        In the end the poor boy waited and waited yet nothing changed. His severe loss of Vitamin C soon showed its effects, slowly draining his life due to the overwhelming boredom and hopeless anticipation of another chapter. His death, like his life, was full of nothing but pain and bitter disappointment.

        Will a new chapter ever be released? Will Cupcake’s soul find peace? And who is the mysterious, dashing figure who is narrating this pointlessness?

        Find out next time on. . . Dragon Ball Z–!!
        Oops, wrong story.
        ( ; — _– )

  28. d3san says:

    gib
    next
    chaptuh

    @@

  29. Bander_Used_Snatch says:

    guess she awoke to her fire nation powers or something? btw thanks for the chapter

    • The_Truth says:

      I see what you did there Bander_Used_Snatch, “fire nation” powers… sounds like a catchphrase from ‘Last Airbender: The Legend of Aang’!

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